庸非(陈黎明) 发表于 2024-1-2 15:49:55

问鹅有感

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庸非(陈黎明) 发表于 2024-1-2 15:50:52

看到楼洪民文里的鹅照,突有所感。如今鸭鹅分不清,以后狼狈狗猫虎也是一脑子糊涂了。[捂脸]

成老师 发表于 2024-1-3 05:34:39

生活气息浓厚!

成老师 发表于 2024-1-3 05:40:18

生活气息浓厚,但是文学是源于生活、高于生活,生活素材需要提练、加工才能成为文学。
絮我直言,这首诗歌还需要好好提练,好好加工!
文学不是现实生活的搬运工!
个人建议,仅供参考!
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