春天里的一把火（2）
<!----><style type="text/css">html{font-size:375%}</style><link href="https://pics-app.cnyw.net/static/publish/css/style.css?v=20240712" rel="stylesheet" position="1" data-qf-origin="/static/publish/css/style.css?v=20240712"><!-- 付费贴--> <div class="preview_article "> <!----> <p>春天里的一把火</p><p> </p><p>文/陈黎明（浙江）</p><p> </p><p>雨水开始</p><p>春天烧起一把火</p><p>雷雨把惊蛰的土松了松</p><p> </p><p>一切绿植的脚伸了伸</p><p>咧咧声中溪水解冻泛洪</p><p>枝芽褪壳冒泡的笑容</p><p>爬上春窗口的鸟虫</p><p>春天这张白纸画满彩虹</p><p> </p><p>所有点燃的种子</p><p>都有一个秋的丰隆</p><p> </p><p>备注，三十多年前同事楼老师点评：</p><p>《春天里的一把火》 这首诗以春天为主题，通过生动的意象和简洁的语言，描绘了春天万物复苏的景象。以下是对这首诗的点评：</p><p> </p><p>1. 意象生动：诗中运用了丰富的自然意象，如“雷雨”“绿植”“溪水”“枝芽”“鸟虫”等，这些意象共同构建了一个充满生机与活力的春天画面。特别是“雷雨把惊蛰的土松了松”和“枝芽褪壳冒泡的笑容”等句子，形象地表现了春天大地苏醒、植物生长的过程。</p><p> </p><p>2. 语言简洁：诗歌语言简洁明快，没有过多的修饰，却能准确传达出春天的气息。例如“咧咧声中溪水解冻泛洪”一句，通过拟声词“咧咧”和动词“解冻”“泛洪”，生动地描绘了冰雪消融、溪水奔流的场景。</p><p> </p><p>3. 节奏感强：诗歌的节奏感较强，句子长短交错，读起来有一种自然的韵律感。尤其是“春天这张白纸画满彩虹”一句，既富有画面感，又带有一种跳跃的节奏，仿佛春天的色彩在眼前流动。</p><p> </p><p>4. 主题鲜明：诗歌紧扣春天的主题，展现了春天万物复苏、生机勃勃的景象。结尾“所有点的种子 / 都有一个秋的丰隆”更是将春天的希望与秋天的丰收联系起来，寓意深刻，表达了对自然循环的赞美和对未来的期待。</p><p> </p><p>5. 情感含蓄：诗歌的情感表达较为含蓄，没有直接抒发情感，而是通过描绘自然景象来传递对春天的热爱与赞美。这种含蓄的表达方式让读者在阅读过程中自然而然地感受到春天的美好。</p><p> </p><p>总体而言，这首诗通过生动的意象、简洁的语言和鲜明的主题，成功地描绘了春天的生机与活力，表达了对自然的热爱与赞美。</p><p> </p><p class="empty_paragraph"> </p><p class="qf_image big noneditable" contenteditable="false"><img src="https://pics-app.cnyw.net/forum/20250317055959front2_0_1011626_Fn5vKnMIjXRd_x6unZDEHrnmBv3I.jpg?watermark/1/image/aHR0cDovL3BpY3MtYXBwLmNueXcubmV0L18yMDE5MDQyNTA5MTYwMF81Y2MxMGE1MDc5ZjY2LnBuZw==/dissolve/100/gravity/SouthEast" alt="" width="1000" height="750" data-qf-origin="forum/20250317055959front2_0_1011626_Fn5vKnMIjXRd_x6unZDEHrnmBv3I.jpg?watermark/1/image/aHR0cDovL3BpY3MtYXBwLmNueXcubmV0L18yMDE5MDQyNTA5MTYwMF81Y2MxMGE1MDc5ZjY2LnBuZw==/dissolve/100/gravity/SouthEast" /></p><p class="empty_paragraph"> </p><p class="qf_image big noneditable" contenteditable="false"><img 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